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Over-indulgence in all activities can do harm than good...We should have a well balanced lifestyle and shouldn't sacrifice one aspect of our life for another actually hobbies put variety into our life and you know variety is the spice of life...

We should alwayse organize a time for takeing pride in our appearance... 

تو این دو خط آخر میخوام بگم باید همیشه یه وقتی بذاریم به خودمون برسیم(از لحاظ ظاهری)ط 

Answer 1

Hi dear Zeinoo. :)

This is my suggestion :

Over-indulgence in any activity can do more harm than good...We should have a well-balanced lifestyle and shouldn't sacrifice one aspect of our life for another. Hobbies put variety into our life and variety is the spice of life...

We should always set aside a time for taking care of ourselves and our appearance...

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Dear Soodabe...Thank you so much...

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You're welcome, dear zeinoo. :)